Teenage Drug And Alcohol Abuse
May edit / review this please?
This is part of a letter, can you please edit / revise this to be more persuasive. Teen drinking adversely affects both the body and life, then why do people do it? I know some of you may be thinking, "an alcoholic beverage is a beverage, beer, soda is no different. You may think that now, but once I told you these facts, hopefully you change your mind. Research site web: "Learn about alcoholism," shows that alcohol use affects the trial. Therefore, those who are intoxicated are more likely to incur in dangerous behavior There are serious health risks involved with drinking alcohol. "Teen Drug Abuse," states that alcohol consumption causes damage to liver, high blood pressure, cancer and more. Given these health problems, is that drinking worth it? How I can add better argument against? I do not like I have in the paragraph. How I can make it sound better? Thanks
his words of "adversely affects adolescent drinking both body and life "and" There are serious health risks involved with alcohol consumption "are redundant in the paragraph, thus avoiding a second mention (that is misplaced as it is). argumentative writing documents, do not use "I" You have to get out of the argument unless your personal narrative is somehow part of what you're writing. "I know some of you may be thinking …" is rather weak. What if we are not thinking about it? Find a source where you can give some grounds for someone who drinks, and then use that as a solid foundation for your countertop. It now has the quote "the Beer is no different than soda. It is a quote, he said this? What you are referring? Please please please delete the phrase "You can think now, but once I tell you these facts, hopefully you change your mind. "Using" wait "is written with the reader in accordance with you, when you cite references should be strong enough that we have no reason to disagree. Furthermore, "… Once I tell you …" We are essentially saying that you are about to say something, and what is not necessary. Be sure to keep in the mind of your audience. When you ask "Why do people do? "Is the paper for coming to understand why people drink it despite the risks, or is your goal to persuade drinkers not to drink? The answer lies in his statement of the thesis. Your spelling and punctuation is a bit off, too, of course.
(part 1) New Survey Shows Teen Drug Use Goes Down
